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Some people believe students should work part time while studying. Do you agree?

I believe that students benefit from working part time, as long as the job stays under fifteen hours a week. First, a part-time job teaches skills that a classroom cannot. In my second year, I worked at a small bookshop, and dealing with difficult customers taught me more about communication than any presentation I had given. In addition, earning money changes how a student thinks about it. When I paid for my own laptop, I compared prices for two weeks, something I had never done before. However, I would not recommend a demanding job during exam periods, because tired students lose more in grades than they gain in salary. Overall, part-time work is valuable when it is limited and planned around the academic calendar.

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• الجملة الأولى موقف واضح مع شرط (as long as). الشرط يُظهر تفكيراً متزناً.
• First و In addition و However و Overall: أربعة روابط تعطي هيكلاً مرئياً.
• كل سبب يتبعه مثال شخصي محدد فيه تفصيل (bookshop، fifteen hours، two weeks).
• جملة However تعترف باستثناء. هذا يرفع درجة المحتوى ولا يضعف الموقف.
• تنوع الأزمنة: مضارع للرأي، ماضٍ للمثال، ماضٍ تام في had never done.